Fynn
is an EoFF Hero and/or Heroine
Radical Dreamer

:P

You were very harsh, actually. I cried. For like 3 days.

Thank you for your good feedback. I just want to say that I'm sorry for abruptly ending my prompt before the climax. I should have continued, but I just find writing to be a bit difficult and frustrating at times. Next time I attempt another prompt, I'll hopefully do a better job writing. Again, thanks for your feedback.

Ah, that makes sense. I am extremely envious of people who are bilingual. I seem to be okay at picking up languages but without some kind of rigid learning and the ability to actually practice, it goes out the window pretty quick. I'm very keen to read through all of your things and I will probably write as detailed feedback as I can for you, because even though I'm still developing as a writer, I think I've had enough formal training to be able to critique and offer feedback that could help you out!

Thanks! I'm glad you seemed to like them overall. I enjoy the third person narrative with questions, but I can see how it isn't for everybody. I'll try to work on adding some more descriptions in my scenes. I appreciate the feedback

I haven't read through any of your prompts in full yet but I like your writing and it strikes me that English might not even be your first language. I'm impressed.

I would be excited to read that

Oh, I'm sorry xD. I didn't realize it was intentional. It honestly set me back a little bit because I had a character established in my mind based on the intro text and when the speech pattern changed, the whole character changed, which was a bit odd. The later paragraphs I didn't have that difficulty though, but that may have been because I'd already had the character in my mind and knew the speech pattern? I'm not sure.

Overall though, it was really interesting. I want to know more about the characters and you already set up some interesting dynamics that I would like to see more of. One of my favorite things about stories and video games is the relationships and dynamics between characters and I think you did that really well.

Yes ! It's still disturbing though !!!


Actually, no, I got him first time round. Then again, I was really determined to see him gone.



idk they do seem to be a bit pedophile-y, but the violence rate over there is extremely low, so maybe they think that Westerners are effed up because of how violent we can be, and those war games.


So guess, no place is perfect ? xD

Then I will reduce your sentence to three years.