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MKusanagi
A few things
1) Needs a thesis, or more easily found thesis
2) don't know if it was just formatting difference but there seems to be more than one space between words
3) Over page limit
I'm attaching a reverse copy of your work with highlights where I saw errors or where things could be improved. Over all this is a good essay. I need to read that book haha.
The thesis was sooo hard to do because it comprised two different ideas that I felt needed so much background. The reader/grader also mentioned the heavy intro/indefinite thesis. The spaces between words could be a difference between different editions of Word. I double space after periods (because we're using MLA), but not after individual words.
Thanks for your editing! I received a grade for this paper (A- yay!), but I'll definitely keep your suggestions in mind for the next.