before u came my love was broke then it fixed

[Mogi]

This only proves that your school needs a better English department.

My school needs a new everything. They're tearing it down soon. Not even kidding.

and mentioning the colour of his skin did have an impact on the story; it could have been assumed by the use of slang

Really now...how do you figure that?

Well, it could be taken completely differently context if one had assumed that he was white or asian!

Why Mogi your friend sounds like a real jerk for reading something that wasn't his to read and even out loud! I feel sorry for the kid who wrote the poem and maybe that is romantic, sometimes it doesn't need to be perfect as long as his girlfriend appreciates the time he put in it.

He really is a jerk, but everyone at my school loves him anyway. I'm not quite sure how that works out.

Thy trout slaps
Mogi in thee face
Since good sir
you have been a disgrace!
Take that poetry! Mwahaha...

Why such violence ;_;

If you don't condone the reading, why are you posting it into here and wishing you could remember more?

No one else here knows the kid who wrote it, so I think that it's not nearly the same.

I think bad poetry with good intentions such as this is sweet and romantic more than most poetry out there is. It has far more meaning behind most stuff out there, and I hope the girl liked it

I agree with you completely. Also, he didn't give it to her. A few people on his bus are helping him rewrite it.

I thought the curly hair line was really cute.

And this is why I wish I could remember more. There was a lot of other content like this. There were sunsets and moonsets, but I can't remember how they were written in.

I love how it starts off romantic, but turns into a battle rap

Most of it had that romantic undertone to it; the more violent lines came out of nowhere here and there.