Might want to be careful. A teacher might be googling your paper and finding a copy of it online, mark you down for plagiarism xD

You use "women" instead of "woman" in the first paragraph, once with daisy and once with tom (although this might be subjective)

" becomes delusional by" you'll want to say 'is turned delusional by', or 'becomes deluded by', or something. That combination doesn't quite work, as it stands.


For the second paragraph, since your main point is that daisy sacrifices what she has to gain economic and societal power, tell us that earlier (first or second sentence), then show with a quote how she got her stature, or how she abused it.

"To live out the American Dream is to never abandon one's morals. We see that Daisy does exactly this in [chapter whatever], where [quote]. By [doing what she did in quote], Daisy shows that she has put more value on her social status than [whatever she screwed over].

Make sure you dig out some quotes! Randomly flipping through the book is more effective than not looking at all

You'll also want to explain what exactly the American dream means-- are these characters fulfilling it, or are they perverting it? This would be something good to have in your first and final paragraphs, and refer to in the body.

Also, make sure you get rid of your conjunctions! No apostrophes