The names. x.x I don't know if it's cause i'm a cynical party pooper but the names turned me off the entire thing. They were so... "unique" that I immediately got disinterested. Usually when people use unique names, they are trying to be different so hard that it ruins the story in many places.

And your prologue introduced some big moments but kinda skipped over them. What you briefly touched on could have been expanded for a emotional one-two-punch. But you didn't.