I read chapter 1-3 and I am actually impressed. I usually find fanfics to be uninspired and ugly and this one seems an exception. I don't like it enough to read all 90 odd chapters although if you're into this sort of thing, I definately suggest you take a look. Just the fact that I'm even posting something in a thread about a fanfic should tell you something.

My only crit so far is that I don't know if I can believe Cloud's personality.