Rate this small poem about via infinito out of 10

[Markus. D]

we have a poem antholgy to make at tafe this term.

ive written a real short one about the first steps into via infinito.
please rate it for me.

Into the Bevelle depths.

As I walked inside the temples of Bevelle.
I started to feel chills up my spine.
I felt the calling of hell.
Hearing fiend’s cries chime.
I’ve ventured through there before it seems.
All though I’ve never been.
I feel a sudden pull to a stone sculptred door.
The darkness inside it gives the feel of a infinite fall.
But the time is now, me and my friends must go.
Into the burdens and woes, of via… infinito.

by Anonymous.

[boys from the dwarf]

we have a poem antholgy to make at tafe this term.

ive written a real short one about the first steps into via infinito.
please rate it for me.

Into the Bevelle depths.

As I walked inside the temples of Bevelle.
I started to feel chills up my spine.
I felt the calling of hell.
Hearing fiend’s cries chime.
I’ve ventured through there before it seems.
All though I’ve never been.
I feel a sudden pull to a stone sculptred door.
The darkness inside it gives the feel of a infinite fall.
But the time is now, me and my friends must go.
Into the burdens and woes, of via… infinito.

by Anonymous.

that is a realy good and descriptive poem and and all that stuff so id give it 8-9 out of 10 (probbably 9.) :bgl:

[Markus. D]

yay!!!! thanks

[Bomber]

Not bad. Not bad at all...

8/10

Very descriptive. It gives me as the reader a sense of eerieness, which is totally in line with what goes on under Bevelle.

You might want to proofread your work and fix up a few small grammatical errors.

Nicely done.

[The Anarchy Angel]

8/10, for the sheer sake that its so cool!

[lulusgirl]

I give you a 10.
Nice Work ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

[Ultima Shadow]

4 since it didn't include any Rikku x Yuna hentai.

[Markus. D]

4 since it didn't include any Rikku x Yuna hentai.

fair... enough...