There are two things that I think would probably help.

First: Find a spell-checking program and use it. If you can, find a friend to edit your story for you, too. This friend will be very helpful.

Second: I think you should focus less on giving an overview on the situation, such as just describing Adel and starting with the year, and focus more on giving details, and a plot. Reveal things like Adel's tyranny, inability to love and so on through the story. Try to focus on telling it through the characters. Physical description should probably be only told where it really enhances what you're going for--if you're writing a part where Adel is meant to be intimidating, say, you might want to note that she's huge.

That might just be stylistic, but I think it'll help. In addition, you should seriously consider removing things like 'you' outside of dialogue. Try not to tell the reader what they should believe.