>> Gate7 [a couple of pages]..

[black orb]

>>> This is a comic/manga thing Ive been working on.. I know its far from perfect and there is lot of room for improvement here but I think I will get the hang of it as long I keep drawing more pages..
BTW this are just random pages I picked from the beginning of the first chapter, so they are not in order/related.. No dialog yet, I`ll do that when Im done with the pages..
Comments and suggestions are welcome..

[Kawaii Ryûkishi]

My only advice is that you ought to devote the kind of effort you put into your scenery into your characters as well. The kid is stiff and two-dimensional, and the fact that everything surrounding him is so pretty just makes it more distracting.

[Rye]

Those are fantastic. But yes, Kishi hit it right on the head, the kid needs more detail, because everything else is so gorgeous that it kind of alienates him.

[black orb]

>>> Thanks a lot for the advice!, I didnt realize about the two-dimensional character problem.. This is due to my laziness because I just stick patterns on their clothes without doing any proper shading work..

[Rocket Edge]

Those really are great. The setting of the backround on the first page along with the last strike originality into pages.

[Christmas]

Great job.

[black orb]

>>> I edited some panels for this page and put some shading in the characters.. I guess this way look better..

[BG-57]

Very nice. Is this going to be an occult/horror comic?

[black orb]

Very nice. Is this going to be an occult/horror comic?

>>> I guess it has some occult/horror elements but its not that kind of comic..

>>> More edits on the same pages, so i deleted the other attachments..

[Necronopticous]

I didn't see the originals, but this set looks fantastic, Rod.

I hope we can expect more along the same vein.

[Cankook]

I didnt see the first ones either but I like the second set a lot. You have really solid cross hatching and I look forward to seeing more.

[Chemical]

You really grasp the sense of story telling and poetic gesture found in manga. It flows harmoniously, the imagery and the content. I feel sometimes your lines appear a little too rigid though.