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    I...I am going to go out on a limb here, but that sounds like a swear because the context is clear, origin and translation be damned. Will others say, "omg thats a bad word!" if drek is said in front of them? Maybe not, since it is unfamiliar to them, but Desmond certainly knows what the smurf he is saying.

    These footnotes can be useful and it can be great to have such a resource available.

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    Lots of fish based words in your language Bleys!


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    Sephiroth
    Serophyn remembers a dream he had last night. He knew it wasn't just a dream, but he couldn't tell is it was a vision or a memory.
    Serophyn had dreamt about a girl named Cecily who was beautiful and had a beautiful aura but she was sad.
    He wants to cure her sadness and he remembers thing seeing her, but the old Innkeeper wakes him up from his dream.

    Agent Proto
    Ziad, an Akim, arrives to Lucrecia from Akimolm Desert
    He meets a stranger and it is implied Ziad has visited before and didn't know it was the time of the Queen's Festival. He says he has somewhere to stay and isn't there to meet a friend.

    Radley is back on the Lost Soul with the loot and food stolen from the villagers.
    The plan is to head on a week long voyage in to the deeps to sail to the opposite end of the bay, just east of Lucrecia.

    Lonely Paper Star
    Camille is in search of her 2 missing Chocobos, worried she may have went the wrong way.
    She begins to doubt herself and thinks of turning back, but Stissi pushes forward, speeding up.
    Camille gets thrown off of Stissi's back from the speed and the Chocobo continues running ahead without her.
    Camille is tired, in pain, and fed up. She eventually catches the Chocobo's attention, and being able to mount her again.
    They head to the Betheron Wylds, hoping nothing bad will happen.
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    There is no "and Akim" with Ziad.

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    Sorry, I mean AN Akim. He is an akim, correct?

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    Yes he is. :P

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    Formalhaut
    Locke and Alistair arrive in Lucrecia just past noon.
    Alistair is excited about the festival and the performers and Locke thinks about the slums of the city.
    They locate an Inn, the Carbuncle's Cave.
    Locke lies about Alistair's age to get a free room. Alistair is shocked at his behavior.

    *Devore*
    Azelin walks down the street with some plump, irritating ladies who are giving him directions by guiding him.
    He is surprised by all of the Hyu'mans, as the ones he is familiar with are no longer allowed to rule themselves and are always starting wars and hungry for power.
    He spots some Doban who look somewhat similar to himself but are slightly taller, sturdier, and older.
    The ladies point him to the Ceiling Cat.

    Jiro
    Kris, a lady in Naithe, is letting her legs drift in the water as her father checks the crab pots. Today had been a slow day.
    They find many empty crab pots and knowing this to be a good spot to fish and having taken care to not overfish, they wonder if something is scaring them off.
    As her and her father row back, she thinks of telling him to take the day off tomorrow after seeing the disappointment getting to him.
    She looks out on to the sunset and remembers the legend that the more striking a sunset, the more promising tomorrow will be.

    AlaynaMae
    Jacques sat on the veranda waiting for dinner. He had to wait for his father before he could eat, though.
    He was happy his dad had a day off because every day his dad had off he also had off. He spent it mostly whittling.
    He notices two dark silhouettes and eventually recognizes one to be Kris, whom he is happy to see.

    Jinx
    Tala watches the human pace uncomfortably before finally introducing himself as Cohen.
    She introduces herself as Tala Aurora and can see many emotions washing over the man when she speaks.
    She asks him his name.

    AlaynaMae

    Cohen is excited about the bear speaking and understanding him. He thinks of shaking hands with her, but decides against it.
    He asks Tala where he is.
    Tala explains that he is in Lucrecia on Sedorra. The man obviously doesn't understand her and she gets impatient. She is clever and wants to speak to a clever human and not someone slow.
    Tala asks what he's wearing and Cohen rambles on about how he woke up here from the University, before explaining he is wearing the Robes of the Order, the robes of a High Priest.
    Tala concludes that Cohen must be from a different world and Cohen agrees.
    They spot two strangers looking at them.
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    Updated. Also very very tired so forgive me if I got stuff wrong.

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    All good, shion. There's a little typo in Jiro's where it says 'crab post' instead of 'crab pots' that you might want to fix. Also, I'm 99% sure Kris' dad isn't actually an Ursus - he just has big hands. You know, like if someone has 'bear hands', but in this world there are Ursus instead of bears...

    Thanks again for writing up these cliffnotes. It made reviewing what had happened in Naithe before I started my character there so much easier!

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    Oh, sorry about that! The bear stuff apparently has me confused haha

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    No big deal - easily fixed.

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    Tasura
    Derk heads to the Cornerstone Inn after a long day at the Forge.
    He is tossing a bright blue material in his hands.
    He removes his night eyes and uses the blue material, cobalt, to pay at the bar for his usual.

    Jiro
    Gehrard was the bar and was in high spirits because had chased away 2 filthy human scavengers.
    His favorite customer, Derk, had walked in. He serves him in exchange for the cobalt.
    Gehrard doesn't like tabs and asks Derk if he had a good day or a bad day since a bad day led to the same ale but with less upfront payment.

    Agent Proto
    Ziad feels out of place in Lucrecia due to how many people there are.
    He goes to check out the Carbuncle's Cave

    Jiro
    Kris hears Jacques calling out to her and her father leaves knowing how much of a talker her is.
    Jacques asks if Kris saw his father down by the docks and she tells him she hasn't.
    He worries his father may be missing and suggests going to look for him, but Kris tells him he is being dramatic and they say goodnight,

    AlaynaMae
    Jacques is very hungry and worried about his dad, who hasn't stayed out past dark much since his mother died.
    He eats an apple and tries not to worry.
    He throws his apple core outside and nearly hits his dad in the face with it.
    His dad told him he went up the coast to nowhere special and is frustrated at his lack of success for the day.
    Jacques, knowing his dad would not approve of his whittling, hides it behind his back and tells his dad he is going to bed.
    In his bedroom, he puts his whittling in a box he keeps underneath his bed. He doesn't get along with his father and thinks about his mother telling him stories of knights and pirates and such.

    Tasura
    Derk tells Gehrard that he had a good day.
    He talks about how a woman came in wanting him to make her a pair of earrings and he laughs her off saying its a smithy and not a jeweler.
    He asks Gehrard how business is with the fetival.
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    Doin' great, shion.
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    In case you're wondering what is happening with the footnotes, I am going to takeover after Shion's spectacular performance.

    Well, I will be after my darn exam tomorrow. Expect a HUMUNGOUS update at some point. Thanks guys for your patience!


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    Default A most humongous update - Part One

    Right, so where were we? Sorry I've been so behind, life issues.

    Anyway, I'll be catching up. The footnotes below here are all the ones on Page Four that haven't been footnoted. I'll do Page Five and Page Six of the Official Story when I've had a break reading everyone's stories!

    Again, any corrections, don't hesitate to slap me, and then inform me as to what needs correcting.

    Loony BoB
    Having noticed an Aelum, another person came to greet her, much to Jahred's chagrin.
    Determined to meet her, Jahred ushers Kathvi in the direction of the Aelum.
    Showing great respect because the Ursus assisted him earlier in life, Jahred enquires to the Aelum, asking if she recognises the race to which Kathvi belongs to.
    Meanwhile, the companion to the Aelum is fascinated by the three people stood before him, making Jahred uncomfortable.

    Madonna
    Blackie Ganister is disturbed by the sounds of warking and loud noises. He is less than impressed.
    A young, big, dumb man came crashing through, asking for Blackie. His companion confirms this, all the while, struggling with his chocobos. Blackie noticed they looked abused and fearful.
    The two men are looking to sell the two chocobos, and know from others that Blackie would buy and sell almost anything. Blackie simply frowned.
    The two men had no papers, and the loud noises has disturbed the entire Wylds, and the men need a good axing. Blackie's confrontational style alerted the two men.
    Blackie exclaims he is a businessman, not a murderer, and offers them the paltry sum of 130 Arnan Coin. The men scoff at this offer, and claim that it is two versus one.

    Formalhaut
    Locke and Alistair prepare to leave the inn when they notice an Akim and the innkeeper, haggling. The innkeeper struggles over the Akim's name.
    The Akim is introduced as Ziad. Locke instantly recognises him as a traveller, and the two converse, particularly about the Queen's Festival.
    Ziad offers to play a game of darts, which Locke eagerly accepts.

    Agent Proto
    Ziad misses his first dart by a wide margin. Playing the game reminds him of his childhood.
    Locke inquires further. During calm, windless days in the desert, Ziad explains, he and his friends would draw targets in the sand, and throw rocks, scoring points based on accuracy.
    Intrigued, Locke asks for it's name, to which Ziad replies there is no official name.

    Jinx
    Tala, the Aelum and Cohen, the human look upon the odd couple with much puzzlement. She recognised one of them as an Akim, but the other, while analogous to a Snow Fox, was a creature she has never seen before.
    Tala listens to the Akim's question while Cohen grins, enjoying himself.
    Equally puzzled as to Kathvi's race, she responds that only during dinner would she see something looking like her.

    Sigrid notices a blue creature rising out from the water.
    This fish-like man begins asking a myriad of questions, about the land, about Sigrid, and so on.
    Excited about the strange new creature, Sigrid responds to all his questions and looks at him in expectation.

    Jiro
    Derk, one of his favourite patrons, was complained to Gerhard about his driggers, while also relaying today's activity at the smithy.
    Repeating his motto about 'the customer isn't always right', Gerhard tells Derk about his business during the Queen's Festival. He complains about humans, thinking that they 'own the place'.
    Just then, three humans enter his pub. They ask for a bed, some ale and some stew. Gerhard flatly refuses, and throws a stool at them, deliberately missing so he doesn't have to mop up any blood.

    Kris awoke and ate with her father, and set off by herself fishing, to prove that she could do it on her own.
    The day started slow, and the fish were avoiding the nets. Undeterred, Kris rowed to an inlet in the west, where she noticed a boat aground on the shoreline.
    A figure lay inside, seemingly dead. He suddenly sat bolt upright, startling both Kris and himself.
    Introducing himself as Ceres, Kris felt him warm and comforting, and so was not nervous around the stranger.
    Kris informs Ceres where he is; he is not familiar with Naithe or other Sedorran cities. Knowing the man could not survive in his wrecked boat, she offers the mysterious man a stay at her parent's house.

    AlaynaMae
    Jacques struggled to get some rest, and thinking it a fruitless endeavour, decided to go for a walk.
    Creeping out of the house, he wandered towards the beach, feeling the cool water between his toes.
    Jacques counted the fishermen, and Kris, rise with the sun and row towards the Deeps. He found it odd that Kris was by herself.
    The sun fully risen, Jacques walked back home, before his dad could wake.
    His dad already awake, Jacques is chastised for not working on Mrs Pan's table, and is denied breakfast, working until mid afternoon.

    Loony BoB
    Kathvi winces at Tala's remark, but for Jahred, he is certain that Kathvi is very foreign, as even an Aelum could not identify Kathvi.
    Unsure as to the tone of Tala's remark, Jahred bows again to the Aelum, and ushers Kathvi away once more to find a place of rest.
    Jahred was anxious to ascertain who Kathvi was, as after the festival, Kathvi would surely stand out more obviously.
    Jahred takes Kathvi to an inn where he has a room booked, and leaves her there to close up his stall, whilst admiring the pyrotechnics the Doban had on display.
    He tells his men he would be busy for the coming days, and to take the wagon to Akimolm after it's use.
    Returning to Kathvi, Jahred tries to learn more about her, and where she came from.


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